prep for essay
-A bully kicks my friensd outside at recess
-A reason fro that might be that the bully is in very bad mood.
-the person would not be liked tht much or getn kicked back from the person.
-A solution might be to tell a teacher,a parent,or cope. or you could just back away. or talk to the bully and tell them to stop it.
Would you like big bruise on your leg? Neither did me friend. Today outside at recess a bully kicked my friend just because my friend scored a goal on him! I did not know what to do, so I stayed quiet. Its a problem when you see a bully that does something and you do not know who to tell.
I think the bully did it because the bully was in a very bad mood. Or maybe just did not like my friend that much. I think he could have said he was sorry or took her to the office, but he didnt he just kept playing. It was a very nice day outside it was 75 degrees fahrenheit the sky was blue and the grass was freshly cut, and once the kick happened it turned the whole day around! And my friend Maddie went to the Docter to see if her bone had chipped. It was not, but it was very badly bruised.
Everyone outside said "You should say sorry that wasnt very nice at all!" the bully ignored it and kept playing. Some people do not respect this kid the way they used to before he kicked Maddie. The other bad thing is he got away with it, for the day.
I think that i should either tell my mom,a teacher,or the bullies mom. I think someone in authority should know so they can keep an eye on him. Maybe i should back away so the bully doesn't hate me, "But he can not get away with this, he just can not!"
I ended up telling my mother i said "Mom today outside my friends got kicked our side and has a very bad ruised leg!" and it turns out my mom was friends with the bullies mom and she had coffee with her and talked to her about the problem. The bullies mom was very sad to hear that and had a talk with her son. Later the bully wrote a note to Maddie and sad sorry in person and got her a very cute, and fuzzy teddy bear. She said " Thank you i forgive you!"
My problem was that i did not know what to do when a problem arose. Now i will know what to do. I can tell my mom because she will know what to do.
Ideas 5; Organization 5; Word Choice 5 Good use of specific descriptive words; Voice 5 Good use of dialogue and specific descriptions; Fluency 3 Many run on sentences; Conventions 2 Multiple misspellings and sentence problems Total = 25 = B
Promblem-Solution-Essay
Aaron's Gift Test
prep for essay
-A bully kicks my friensd outside at recess
-A reason fro that might be that the bully is in very bad mood.
-the person would not be liked tht much or getn kicked back from the person.
-A solution might be to tell a teacher,a parent,or cope. or you could just back away. or talk to the bully and tell them to stop it.
Would you like big bruise on your leg? Neither did me friend. Today outside at recess a bully kicked my friend just because my friend scored a goal on him! I did not know what to do, so I stayed quiet. Its a problem when you see a bully that does something and you do not know who to tell.
I think the bully did it because the bully was in a very bad mood. Or maybe just did not like my friend that much. I think he could have said he was sorry or took her to the office, but he didnt he just kept playing. It was a very nice day outside it was 75 degrees fahrenheit the sky was blue and the grass was freshly cut, and once the kick happened it turned the whole day around! And my friend Maddie went to the Docter to see if her bone had chipped. It was not, but it was very badly bruised.
Everyone outside said "You should say sorry that wasnt very nice at all!" the bully ignored it and kept playing. Some people do not respect this kid the way they used to before he kicked Maddie. The other bad thing is he got away with it, for the day.
I think that i should either tell my mom,a teacher,or the bullies mom. I think someone in authority should know so they can keep an eye on him. Maybe i should back away so the bully doesn't hate me, "But he can not get away with this, he just can not!"
I ended up telling my mother i said "Mom today outside my friends got kicked our side and has a very bad ruised leg!" and it turns out my mom was friends with the bullies mom and she had coffee with her and talked to her about the problem. The bullies mom was very sad to hear that and had a talk with her son. Later the bully wrote a note to Maddie and sad sorry in person and got her a very cute, and fuzzy teddy bear. She said " Thank you i forgive you!"
My problem was that i did not know what to do when a problem arose. Now i will know what to do. I can tell my mom because she will know what to do.
Ideas 5; Organization 5; Word Choice 5 Good use of specific descriptive words; Voice 5 Good use of dialogue and specific descriptions;
Fluency 3 Many run on sentences; Conventions 2 Multiple misspellings and sentence problems
Total = 25 = B